After discussion with my tutor, 

• Shot framing and timing.  My shots are all candid, as in they are not posed, and this has raised some small issues in terms of framing and timing.  I had thought to ‘let myself off the hook’ with this because of the candid nature of the shots.  But since completing this assignment I have paid extra attention to this in some of the photographers that I have researched.  It is clear that this is not a valid excuse.  In particular, my research of Steve McCurry and his shots from India show how many of shots, despite being candid, and confirmed as such video interviews, are perfectly framed and timed.  Some examples from my final images are: Naomi – if I had stepped two paces to the left, the rubbish bin would have been hidden, Chandra Kotak – the gap between Chandra and the edge of the frame is different to the gap between the other person and the edge of the frame. As my images are documentary in style, they are not something I can go back and re-shoot but this is a learning point to pay particular attention to going forwards; I have though corrected the spacing at the edge of the frame for Chandra – it makes a surprising amount of difference to the balance of the image and even though the two subjects are now right at the edge of the shot, I think this work still as the image is intended to emphasise the distancing.
• Dynamism.  All my shots are taken head-on and from a standing position.  I learnt some time ago that when editing a set, it is important to have variety, and I believe that I have achieved this in terms of content in this assignment, but not in this aspect of shot capture.  An image of note that shows just how different this could be is the Fig. 1 below which I found when researching Karen Yeomans.

• I was pleased that my tutor agreed with my approach to include window and mirror aspects to my assignment but it is important to remember that this was only the case because I argued my thinking for it and then I showed how I would present the collection in order to deal with this contradiction in a single set.  I have learnt that it is important to consider the final presentation as the images are being captured and then edited.
• Lastly, my idea to list names and their conditions doesn’t work for me any longer.  I think this is something that needs to be one way or the other.  If I am going to name the person, then they are not an anonymous statistic.  As the assignment is, in part at least, a window into my life, then I think it is important the people captured in the images are not anonymous.  I am therefore choosing to name the people in the images rather than give their statistics.

I am not changing the images from the original draft assignment, but I am changing their captions to have names only and, for this reason, I am presenting them again below.

Presentation of Assignment

The figure below is how I would present the collection as a whole. The images would be displayed mounted on board with no frames. This choice is to emphasise that the images are a set, I feel that framing them would separate them.

Final Images

Figures

Figure 1. Yeomans, K., n.d. Goal Diggers FC #1. [image] Available at: <https://www.the-aop.org/find/photographers/profile/9762/karen–yeomans> [Accessed 7 June 2020]